My voice is under arrest
Indeed. The vocals killed it for me. They're just tolerable and I feel they could be much better. Guitar playing is a bit funky and pretty interesting compared to a lot of other Dylan wannabes out there.
I appreciate your honestly greatly. Thank you
I find the most interesting part of this song is the first 25 seconds. Something about that opening synth...
I'd love to see you take those ideas and expand them. As far as techno goes, I'd avoid overusing obnoxious synths like so many artists do (a strong reason why I dislike techno & trance).
I can hear the influence of Merzbow at certain points. You struggle with achieving atmosphere, as there are many indistinct sounds that feel thrown in randomly. The guitar for one thing could be more interesting... the whole backwards effect is a tired cliche. All in all, it needs more focus. I don't any sense of what this song is about. I would simply suggest experimenting more.
You should expand this
It's finely composed and reminds me Aphex Twin a bit, but it really could be more...
I think a section with a lively drum track or some ambience could be interesting. Good work.
The big problem is all the instrument voices sound like crap, which makes your ideas barely listenable. Where as I'm ok with the melodies, the voices are an issue that should not be overlooked unless you want the listener to hate you.
Thanks for the review, I will try to find better voices for my instruments. I just started messing with FL Studio and have been using what it came with (FL Slayer, which I know is looked down upon big time, but I have no idea where to find stuff!)
Again, thanks! I will not post another song until I find better sounds,
What's with the awkward silence at 0:28? That being said, you do take a different approach than a lot of other self-proclaimed DJs. You can do a lot with a little. This is very spare but it's compelling... it reminds me of goth pop/rock from the 80s. I guess I just really love the main synth. It's got a haunting, almost gloomy vibe. Hard to describe. The other instruments don't really add much, I would rather you focus on the main and then rebuild on it as you see fit. You've already got melodies that work, now you just need to expand on them.
ah the silence. its because i have the demo plugin for it (so i can use it, but its not as good as it can be). the cheapest way to buy it is around 50 dollars. guess whos broke? :D. thanks for the comment :3
A Wizard with a Plastic Staff
I can't quite explain why I don't like this. Perhaps it's because it sounds like it was made for some cheesy RPG (Runescape, cough cough). There may be a good song in there somewhere, but the instrument voices make me gag. If I could put it into a metaphor, it's like a wizard with a plastic staff. Not too magical.
Feel bad song?
The title is fitting. It's probably what you would hear if you went to a carnival with a major migraine. Granted the song is well-composed so I give you points for that. I especially like the percussion-y synth effects. It's not totally abrasive, but just enough to unsettle you. Perhaps throw in a nicer melody or transition to break up the mood. It also is kind of awkward as a loop, either change the ending or expand on it.
Get rid of the weak intro from 0:00-0:09. The main melody is pretty interesting and you utilize it well. This sounds pretty incomplete otherwise.
Vague but has potential
I could imagine literally hundreds of ways in which you could expand on this, so it's really going to come down to your own intent with the song. Adding backing melodies/chords would certainly give you a better idea of the mood, because right now it feels a bit "naked". I get the sense that it is supposed to sound urgent, like an epic fight scene. Percussion wise, I could imagine some fast breakbeats or a slow, heavy bass and snare pattern. These are just my suggestions.
thanks. The reason it feels naked, is because it is using the default tone. It sound like a telephone tone. I will probably add breakbeat.
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